OK, I was able to check it this time. You made some good improvements and added some additional details; however, many of these details seemed to add more points about the plot of the novel. As I have not read this novel, I found some of it to be confusing. Instead, you need to keep the focus on the similarities and differences between the characters you are discussing. Write your essay for a broader audience, including people who have not read the book. The thesis statement has been improved, but it could still more clearly preview the specific points you will discuss in the body paragraphs. The topic sentences should contain key words that connect back to the thesis statement. You also missed a few of my suggested corrections as well.
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삭제OK, I was able to check it this time. You made some good improvements and added some additional details; however, many of these details seemed to add more points about the plot of the novel. As I have not read this novel, I found some of it to be confusing. Instead, you need to keep the focus on the similarities and differences between the characters you are discussing. Write your essay for a broader audience, including people who have not read the book. The thesis statement has been improved, but it could still more clearly preview the specific points you will discuss in the body paragraphs. The topic sentences should contain key words that connect back to the thesis statement. You also missed a few of my suggested corrections as well.
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